The number of "ands" in the sentence made it really confusing. If I was editing the story, I would ask Kennedy how the sentence is supposed to read because changing punctuation in this sentence could alter the meaning.
To me, the sentence looks like it should read, "A strip along Panama City Beach was lined with traffic, and vacationers enjoyed parasailing, shopped idly at gift shops and sipped colorful drinks at tiki bars." Again, I would ask the reporter because that could be a lot different from what Kennedy was trying to get across.
The story can be found at
http://www.chicagotribune.com/news/nationworld/sns-ap-labor-day-travel,0,1728564.story
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